PeerAnalysis 1st draft

Kevin Nguyen
Marshall/Marilyn
ICS 24
11.11.09
Analysis of Joe-Vincent
Joe-Vincent Estioko made a spoken word piece, well actually two pieces, “Sleep to Dream” and Thank You Mom and Dad”. But he used chose “Sleep to Dream” as the main one to present with. It is about his feelings and thoughts of Heaven, like how it is (to him): “a world of peace” or “where you don’t have to worry about being brutally attacked.” He tried to have emotion in his work just as much as Alvin Lau did with his “Asian-American, Where Have You Gone?” In fact, it was this artist that motivated Joe to start his own spoken word in the first place.
The project for him wasn’t too difficult, if not, a discovery. The only problem was figuring out what to write about and memorizing it. Then the creative piece came to him in an unusual way, “I had no idea what my topic was going to be but one night before I fell asleep, different thoughts were rushing in and out of my brain. Then it hit me; why not talk about a dream.” He basically got it all down within one day. He got some rhymes, rhythm, imagery, tempo, and tone in his spoken word. But when I asked him what did he wanted to improve on if he had the time, he replied “I wanted to include some alliterations.” and also to “practice more on the movements on the lines.”
His project was pretty good when he first presented it to me and the whole class. His tone was soft, low, and calm—possibly due to his shyness—enough for all of us to hear. Indeed, the beat, rhyme, imagery, tempo, and tone were there, but there was something else, something inside his soul, within the calm tone, there was heart—his heart.
I learned